A policy statement and an invented promise
A reviser receives an original teaching passage, not a quotation from a published policy document: 我们将继续开展对话,寻求共同关切的解决办法。 The client identifies the speakers as the delegation issuing the statement. A draft says that all participating governments guarantee an immediate settlement of every disputed issue. Another draft says the delegation will continue dialogue and seek solutions to matters of shared concern. The accompanying brief asks for a formal public statement without additional interpretation. The project glossary supplies names but contains no promise about timing or outcome. A colleague argues that a stronger English sentence sounds more authoritative and therefore better suits diplomatic writing. The reviser must decide whether stylistic force justifies changing the actors, the scope of concerns or the level of commitment.
1. Identify the substantive additions in the stronger draft.
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It invents all governments as actors, a guarantee, immediate timing and settlement of every dispute. The source describes continued dialogue and seeking solutions, which does not establish those stronger commitments.
2. Explain a defensible revision method.
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Retain the identified delegation, continued dialogue and the aim of seeking solutions. Use formal natural English, compare every proposition with the source and document any uncertainty rather than supplying political interpretation.