Cutting to One Third: What Survives a ಸಾರಾಂಶ
Divya's writing-skills section asks for a ಸಾರಾಂಶ of a 210-word passage in about one-third of its length, with a title. The passage argues that paddy land in Kerala is being lost both to construction and to fields left fallow; it gives a ten-year decline figure, names two districts, describes one farming family's debts, and closes by urging village-level collective action. Divya's draft is 96 words. It opens 'The passage says that...', keeps both district names and the family's debt figure, adds 'In my opinion this warning is very true even today', and copies one sentence almost word for word because she could not think of a substitute. Her teacher's comment reads: 'Content 3/5, Expression 1/5.' Divya argues that 210 words make 96 words 'almost half, which is close enough', and that opinions make a summary 'more impressive'. The next class test is in four days.
1. Audit Divya's draft against the standard précis rules. For each rule, state the breach and the mark it most likely cost.
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Rule 1 - length. One third of 210 is about 70 words, with a tolerance of roughly five either way. At 96 she is near 46 per cent, well outside tolerance. This is the breach that drives the other problems, because every extra word has to come from somewhere.
Rule 2 - no personal opinion. 'In my opinion this warning is very true even today' is a judgement, not a summary. It is also eleven words of her scarce budget spent on herself rather than on the passage. Cost: both a content and an expression mark.
Rule 3 - no verbatim copying. One sentence is lifted almost intact. In précis marking this is treated as a failure of the specific skill being tested - restating in your own words - and is penalised even when the sentence is central.
Rule 4 - retain the argument, drop illustration. Both district names and the family's debt figure are illustrations. Keeping them pushed out the causal chain: construction plus fallow land produces loss of acreage, which produces loss of food and work, which is why the passage ends with collective action. The content mark of 3/5 reflects that the central idea is present but blurred.
Rule 5 - self-contained opening. 'The passage says that...' wastes four words and frames the summary as reported speech. A précis should read as a piece of writing in its own right.
Map to the marks. Content 3/5: idea present, examples over-weighted, opinion intrudes. Expression 1/5: copied sentence plus filler opener is close to the definition of weak expression in this section.
2. Rewrite the opening two sentences of a corrected précis, and list in order what you would cut to reach about 70 words.
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Opening two sentences. 'Paddy land in Kerala is shrinking as fields are built over or simply left fallow. What is lost is not only acreage but the village's food and work, and only organised local effort can reverse the trend.'
Why these work. The first sentence states the two causes; the second states the consequence and the response, which is the passage's own structure. No reported-speech frame, no opinion, and the two sentences together are 36 words, leaving roughly 34 for the rest.
Cuts, in order of what saves most.
- Delete the opinion sentence entirely (about 11 words).
- Replace the copied sentence with a compressed version in her own words (saves words and removes the penalty).
- Drop both district names - they are illustration, and the argument survives without them (saves about 4–6 words).
- Drop the family's debt figure; one family is an example of the general trend, not a cause of it (saves about 6–8 words).
- Compress the closing exhortation to its substance: organised local effort, not rhetoric about future generations (saves about 8 words).
- Replace 'The passage says that' with nothing (saves 4 words).
Word budget to give Divya. Causes 20 words, consequence 25, response 15, title 5. Titles are not counted in the précis length but must be present if asked for.
3. Divya argues that 96 words is 'almost half, close enough'. Rule on that argument, and state a test for when an example should survive a précis.
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On 'close enough'. One third is the rule of the exercise, not a rounding suggestion. Board-style marking applies a small tolerance, typically a handful of words, and then a penalty that grows with the overrun; 96 against a target of 70 is roughly a third over the permitted maximum and will always be penalised. But the deeper point is that the word limit is not an arbitrary hurdle - it is the instrument that forces selection. A candidate who writes 96 words has usually not decided what the passage is for, and the overrun is a symptom of that indecision rather than a separate fault. Tell Divya: cut first, then count; do not count and then trim.
Test for an example. Delete it and reread the summary. If the argument still stands, the example was decoration and must go. If the conclusion becomes unsupported - as when a passage turns on a single statute, scheme or dated event - the example is load-bearing and stays, compressed to its function rather than its detail.
Apply it here. Remove the two districts and the family's debts: the claim that paddy land is being lost, and the call to collective action, both survive intact. They are decoration, however vivid. A named scheme that caused the loss, by contrast, would have been load-bearing.